60 Sonnets 'Original' and 'Streamlined'

Here are the opening stanzas of "CLXXIX" and "179"

"Though newer ways to film and televise
the subtle shadings of reality
may long enhance the lives of human eyes,
man still will scarcely have the power to see.

That film & better television could
be giving the entire great human race
a clearer sense that nature may be good
is no real proof that humans can have grace.

" The book's main thrust is highly linguistic--highly grammatical--in that the derivative (the 'streamlined') versions may tend to have veneers that seem otherworldly.